07-14-2019, 08:22 PM
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Hi Busker,
thanks for the spoilers, much needed
Not keen on the title (which invites an unnecessary comparison) and confused by the painting (produced/exhibited in 1902).
When would N have seen it?
I don't think the revision has helped S1 (which works well), and I'm still not convinced with S2, mainly for temporal reasons.
Just a thought.
Darling boy,
whose lips are like summer
sweet Sangiovese, the Tuscan sun
tangled in your hair,
- 'wind swept hair' seems far too clichéd.
go trippingly. For Where I go
cranes are reeling
in an icy wind
blown from the depths.
Best, Knot
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Hi Busker,
thanks for the spoilers, much needed
Not keen on the title (which invites an unnecessary comparison) and confused by the painting (produced/exhibited in 1902).
When would N have seen it?
I don't think the revision has helped S1 (which works well), and I'm still not convinced with S2, mainly for temporal reasons.
Just a thought.
Darling boy,
whose lips are like summer
sweet Sangiovese, the Tuscan sun
tangled in your hair,
- 'wind swept hair' seems far too clichéd.
go trippingly. For Where I go
cranes are reeling
in an icy wind
blown from the depths.
Best, Knot
.