Stargazing

[Richard]

Hey ginaparaoan,
I think you have a good idea here with focusing on the stargazing. However, I think you need to make more use of specific images and some punctuation. I'll go into more detail below:

STARGAZING
 
A heartbeat at a shadow
A thousand years of a lifetime
Blank eyes at space
Glinting at colliding stellar atoms -I feel like you need a stronger image than mentioning atoms. What exactly is the speaker seeing here? If it's referring to stars, then describe how they look in a more specific way. For example, why is there a mention of a "lifetime"? Are the stars making the speaker question time, life, mortality? There is a lot of potential here, but you need to be less vague in how you approach it. 
 
Star shoots
From an unknown birthplace
Not finding a celestial manger
Settles its feet to the earth -If you're going to not use periods, then you might as well ditch the capitalization throughout the poem as well. If you want to keep the capitalization, then think about adding punctuation. As a reader, it doesn't matter to me if you want punctuation or not, just be consistent.
 
Icy planet in transit
Walking by to end a terrestrial affair
Solar flares blowing up
A mountain of stardust
 
Sleeping in a vacuum
On a black fabric
Dotted with constellations
Waiting for a star to shoot up
And remain

I think you need to ask yourself how is the speaker feeling about what they are seeing in the stars, and then play around with that more. I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard