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07-07-2019, 04:22 PM

(07-07-2019, 11:13 AM)Seraphim Wrote:
Quote:It seems my idea, the music of ordinary sounds, conversation, not actual music, is not getting across.

The meaning comes across fine. My comments were directed at word choice, etc. Sorry if my comments came across otherwise.

I see your point I will change it to 'near,' I don't want the poem to stutter!!

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Sometimes - by churinga - 07-04-2019, 04:34 PM

RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-04-2019, 08:32 PM

RE: Sometimes - by Knot - 07-04-2019, 09:06 PM

RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-05-2019, 04:02 AM

RE: Sometimes - by Oden Prufrock - 07-05-2019, 04:50 PM

RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-06-2019, 01:21 PM

RE: Sometimes - by Seraphim - 07-06-2019, 04:24 PM

RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-06-2019, 09:56 PM

RE: Sometimes - by Seraphim - 07-07-2019, 11:13 AM

RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-07-2019, 04:22 PM

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