Sometimes
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Quote:It seems my idea, the music of ordinary sounds, conversation, not actual music, is not getting across.

The meaning comes across fine. My comments were directed at word choice, etc. Sorry if my comments came across otherwise.
There is no escape from metre; there is only mastery. TS Eliot
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Sometimes - by churinga - 07-04-2019, 04:34 PM
RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-04-2019, 08:32 PM
RE: Sometimes - by Knot - 07-04-2019, 09:06 PM
RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-05-2019, 04:02 AM
RE: Sometimes - by Oden Prufrock - 07-05-2019, 04:50 PM
RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-06-2019, 01:21 PM
RE: Sometimes - by Seraphim - 07-06-2019, 04:24 PM
RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-06-2019, 09:56 PM
RE: Sometimes - by Seraphim - 07-07-2019, 11:13 AM
RE: Sometimes - by churinga - 07-07-2019, 04:22 PM



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