Divisions
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OK, I'm thinking about it. It could be simply done, but I need to think about all the consequences lol.

Not sure I'm completely sold, but thanks for the suggestion.

I know the line's cliche-ish and would need revision should I decide to keep it.

Rhetorically, I like 'departure' better than 'passing', but that might be construed as a divorce - which would still work...

Also a change based on churinga's crit.
There is no escape from metre; there is only mastery. TS Eliot
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Messages In This Thread
Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-02-2019, 01:18 AM
RE: Divisions - by Oden Prufrock - 07-03-2019, 04:47 PM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-04-2019, 07:28 AM
RE: Divisions - by churinga - 07-04-2019, 11:39 AM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-04-2019, 10:54 PM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-05-2019, 11:59 PM
RE: Divisions - by Oden Prufrock - 07-06-2019, 01:09 AM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-06-2019, 03:56 AM
RE: Divisions - by Oden Prufrock - 07-06-2019, 10:27 AM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-06-2019, 11:29 AM
RE: Divisions - by Oden Prufrock - 07-06-2019, 08:11 PM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-07-2019, 12:16 AM
RE: Divisions - by Knot - 07-07-2019, 01:23 AM
RE: Divisions - by one lass - 07-07-2019, 02:12 AM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-07-2019, 11:04 AM
RE: Divisions - by one lass - 07-10-2019, 09:58 AM
RE: Divisions - by billy - 07-10-2019, 02:37 PM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-10-2019, 10:33 PM
RE: Divisions - by ginaparaoan - 07-11-2019, 12:13 PM
RE: Divisions - by Seraphim - 07-11-2019, 09:51 PM



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