A Dead Man’s Poem

[Oden Prufrock]

Overall, this comes across as a list of over-modified - sometimes confusing/sometimes cliche-ish - images, too heavy on the alliteration, which attempts to come to an anti-climatic epiphany. It took a couple of attempts to wade through the lines. It took a bit of effort.

I wish I could be more enthusiastic.

It’s good you’re thinking about my poem but by analysing it in such general terms you fail to provide constructive criticism. You say my imagery is confusing when you don't attempt to look at what style it is written in (impressionist), which has a specific way of communicating concepts. I don't see how using the image of 'Where's Wally' to express the decaying of flesh and bone in such a smooth way is cliché. Even if it is cliché you didn't look at what I was trying to do and didn't include a single sentence on how I express my themes.

To better understand my style of writing read 'The Love Song Of J. Alfred Prufrock' by T.S Eliot.

Please “Do not critique or attack the poet or critic.”  Only the poem is to be critiqued. The critiques of the poem are not to be critiqued. 

Also, please “do not cry or argue if you don’t like the feedback given.”  Especially in the Intensive forum.  If you don’t find the critique helpful, then simply do not use it.

-Quix/mod

K I’ll just ignore bad feedback then.