07-05-2019, 11:59 PM
As Pru pointed out, 'it' refers to both the tree and the childhood home. I generally write with several different layers in mind, and this time I ambitiously tried for two allegories - under the literal - at once. I think the references on the second allegory were too few and too subtle to work. I don't really believe in beating the reader over the head with something, but I also want them to get it. It's a fine line. I'm guessing it didn't work this time.
I also don't generally post first drafts, but I wanted to see where others would go with it.
The idea started when a tree in the back got hit with lightening, displacing the numerous squirrels which lived there. They moved into the rafters of my back porch, which had a thin layer of vinyl lightly stapled to the bottom of the rafters. I looked out one day in time to see a huge nest, squirrels and all, drop through the vinyl and crash on the deck. Talk about some ticked off squirrels. I wonder what that's a metaphor for....
Time to look at editing. I did add one two four changes above, in bold.
I also don't generally post first drafts, but I wanted to see where others would go with it.
The idea started when a tree in the back got hit with lightening, displacing the numerous squirrels which lived there. They moved into the rafters of my back porch, which had a thin layer of vinyl lightly stapled to the bottom of the rafters. I looked out one day in time to see a huge nest, squirrels and all, drop through the vinyl and crash on the deck. Talk about some ticked off squirrels. I wonder what that's a metaphor for....
Time to look at editing. I did add one two four changes above, in bold.
There is no escape from metre; there is only mastery. TS Eliot