07-05-2019, 04:02 AM
Thanks for coming back Knot, I like your version. I also agree the title should be different.
I have been trying to write in a more immediate style, not formal, and not polished,
so that it is conversational, often repeititive and not condensed. It may work better that way if recited.
I have been trying to write in a more immediate style, not formal, and not polished,
so that it is conversational, often repeititive and not condensed. It may work better that way if recited.

