07-04-2019, 11:39 AM
I also worried about catastrophe, I would have preferred what ever happened, a funeral, a death.
'its nests'
I don't think the nests belong to the tree. You could say 'the nests'
'with no nourishment, no shelter, no comfort'
you don't need this, the image of the abandoned nests says it all.
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I think the poem does what it sets out to do, capture a mood and a situation.
I liked everything about it except these few crits.
'its nests'
I don't think the nests belong to the tree. You could say 'the nests'
'with no nourishment, no shelter, no comfort'
you don't need this, the image of the abandoned nests says it all.
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I think the poem does what it sets out to do, capture a mood and a situation.
I liked everything about it except these few crits.