Offline

[Richard]

Hey churinga,
I like the tone here. I do have some thoughts though:

Offline. -This title made me think about being disconnected from the internet, which in this age also means being disconnected from people. On the one hand, the title works because you can feel the disconnection to others here. However, I think you could have played around more with jumping between both meanings throughout the poem.
 
In these quiet days of no achievement -The use of of an example of an actually non-achievement would strengthen this line and develop the character of the speaker more. 
when it's little things and nothing more. -This line is one of the best in the entire poem because it really captures the lonely tone.
What day it is, is unimportant.
Sleep is deep but sleep is short. -These two lines work because they sum up the speaker's current state (retirement).

Between soliloquies and open cupboards, -The use of the word "soliloquies" bothers me. Why not get super specific and describe something the speaker would talk to their self about? The images that follow ("open cupboards" and "making toast") work well because they are specific.
shopping trips and making toast,
I tap my spine with one more question, -What is the question?
I wait for calls that mean the most. -Again, this line works because it adds to the lonely tone.

Now in a five star unit (view to match). -I feel like this is the only line in the poem that plays around with the other meaning of "Offline" I mentioned above. 
A food fiesta, balcony awaits.
The wine is bitter, the talk intense. -Why is the talk intense? I feel like you could use an image here to strengthen this line.
I leave early, buzzed through iron gates. -This is just food for thought, but why not start with this strophe? I like the idea of starting with the speaking becoming trapped in this facility.

I hope I wasn't too harsh here. I just tend to go deep when it's intensive critique. I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard