On Safdar Hashmi Marg

[busker]

Been MIA for about a year, because life. Wrote something after a long time.

On Safdar Hashmi Marg
 
a lonesome bus parked for the night .... “lonesome” is too much of the author’s voice, dilutes the observational quality of the strophe. Even “lone” is fine

I assume that the poem is about a pair of lovers, the woman reluctant
On balance, I think it’s good that you didn’t go down the path of Safdar Hashmi allusions