06-29-2019, 06:42 AM
Hi Radetof
I look at shadows, their colours; // is this at Centennial? This seems rather abstract, and I get it's a dream, but still, some sort of anchoring to make it work for me
at the bright flowers carefully kept
in Centennial, busy now with Sunday. // because this is rather specific for the line above to be excused
This is not a dream, it continues on from V1, shadows can have colours, depending on what the shadow falls on, eg a shadow on green grass will look green. I have explained the need to use the vernacular 'Centennial' rather than the more explalnatory 'Centennial Park'.
And the cover of your bed was folded
and I woke from my dream shuddering
and thought you were gone. // this really gets me with the end
This is the dream verse.
On the phone, your accent, as you ask
in the patient way of a stranger, // and acquaintance maybe, strangers don't ask that, I'm sorry but seemed a little strange to me
Why not fly over, just for a visit?
It is a strange situation, my ex-lover, Albena, and I have not seen each other for 50 years. We mostly kept in touch via letters and I only called her twice. So her voice did seem like that of a stranger.
Thanks for you detailed comment.
best wishes
Ross
I look at shadows, their colours; // is this at Centennial? This seems rather abstract, and I get it's a dream, but still, some sort of anchoring to make it work for me
at the bright flowers carefully kept
in Centennial, busy now with Sunday. // because this is rather specific for the line above to be excused
This is not a dream, it continues on from V1, shadows can have colours, depending on what the shadow falls on, eg a shadow on green grass will look green. I have explained the need to use the vernacular 'Centennial' rather than the more explalnatory 'Centennial Park'.
And the cover of your bed was folded
and I woke from my dream shuddering
and thought you were gone. // this really gets me with the end
This is the dream verse.
On the phone, your accent, as you ask
in the patient way of a stranger, // and acquaintance maybe, strangers don't ask that, I'm sorry but seemed a little strange to me
Why not fly over, just for a visit?
It is a strange situation, my ex-lover, Albena, and I have not seen each other for 50 years. We mostly kept in touch via letters and I only called her twice. So her voice did seem like that of a stranger.
Thanks for you detailed comment.
best wishes
Ross