No Certainties

[Radetof.Yahska]

Such a nice piece. Long-distance, long-term woes, amirite?!

No Certainties 

Three types of cloud today 
but I don't know to name them.
Nimbus? I like that, a halo.

I look at shadows, their colours; // is this at Centennial? This seems rather abstract, and I get it's a dream, but still, some sort of anchoring to make it work for me
at the bright flowers carefully kept
in Centennial, busy now with Sunday. // because this is rather specific for the line above to be excused

And the cover of your bed was folded
and I woke from my dream shuddering 
and thought you were gone. // this really gets me with the end

On the phone, your accent, as you ask 
in the patient way of a stranger, // and acquaintance maybe, strangers don't ask that, I'm sorry but seemed a little strange to me
Why not fly over, just for a visit?


 

I don't like reading a lot of long poems, so I end up reviewing short ones most of the time. I hope the mods won't smack me for it.

This poem has a heart, and is deeper than most people I know, including me. I think the length is appropriate, and the emotions strong. Personally, L6 seems weak and if you could make it work, I'd really like reading it again and again.

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