An Image of Gray

[Seraphim]

Thanks Paul. Yea - it makes sense. I’ve tried to work on balancing metrics and free verse, but normally from the aspect of using metrics to shore up the rhythms of free verse. After listening to people here, I think I’m try it the other way around - a bit more liberal, as you say.

Thanks for looking in.

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Paul

I had already come to the ‘maybe’ conclusion. Something killing your little darlings lol. Sometimes I’m resistant to the idea. I worked a bit to try fit the language to the era, but I tend to overdo and end up editing a lot. I’ll review your language criticisms.

Gotta look up what a gerund is. I forget.

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Gerund - got it.

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And looking glass wasn’t intended as an Alice reference, but since it’s twice been mentioned I have to admit it’s distraction.

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I’ll especially look at the points you and knot both made.

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Minor revision above