Beyond Recall

[Seraphim]

Thanks for the notes, Knot. I’ll look them over carefully.

Well - hopefully not as far as Sweeney Todd went - he killed his victims lol. But every critique helps me determine if I’ve succeeded in my attempt in communication. Every critique is valuable.

Thanks for yours.

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On second reading I think the ending works well. It does have a volte. One thing a meteorologist my pick you up on, fog and mist are two different things caused by two different conditions but since this isn't a weather report I think it's OK. I did worry about 'transient vapor' simply because the image of fog/mist started to feel over-used.

Rule number 1: never argue with an honest critter lol. They’re offering their valuable time to try to help me out. But may I point out that this isn’t a sonnet?