Blowing Steam from napm 12

[billy]

hard to critiue this one. i see it as a fun concrete poem. in places you could lose an odd word. [to go] in line three but for me these excess words are not a problem. you had to construct the balloon and i think the shape is as important as the words. love the lines that lead to the basket. they and the balloon do have a feel of freedom in them. i like it a lot.

Blowing steam
                                 My hot air 
                       Balloon will carry me
                     Wherever it wants to go
                   I have enough heat to not
                  Care where I land, how hard
                  I might hit the ground, land
                   Or sea or outer space, my
                     Plans are wrapping up.
                      N               c               w
                        o             o              i
                          o           m            t
                            n          i             h
                              e        n          m      fare
                                s      g         e      well
                       And I wouldn't let them
                       If they wanted to.  And
                       They'll never know my
                       Story or the things I've    
                                      Seen.