06-21-2019, 10:54 PM
Hi Knot
I have changed 'like' to 'for' after 'yearning'. Thanks for your detailed crit. I wrote this tonight and posted it immediately. Not my usual practice, so it is rough. I am thinking the internet is instantaneous so poetry should reflect this. Probably only a momentary choice, I usually spend years perfecting a poem but lately my poetry to me seems too polished. Is that special pleading?
I did I write this with a pencil.
cheers
Ross
I have changed 'like' to 'for' after 'yearning'. Thanks for your detailed crit. I wrote this tonight and posted it immediately. Not my usual practice, so it is rough. I am thinking the internet is instantaneous so poetry should reflect this. Probably only a momentary choice, I usually spend years perfecting a poem but lately my poetry to me seems too polished. Is that special pleading?
I did I write this with a pencil.
cheers
Ross