05-27-2019, 12:51 PM
Threw up a quick edit to remedy some obvious issues. Thanks duke and billy for the input.
-Removed comma in first line
-Trimmed ever so slightly, only the words I'm certain required it (Lines 6, 7, and 9)
-Moved "will" to final line (I don't know why it wasn't there, I thought that's where I broke the line. woops)
-Adjusted some wording (Lines 3 and 6)
I'm sure there's more to do, but these seemed obvious to me, so I wanted to take of care of them now.
-Removed comma in first line
-Trimmed ever so slightly, only the words I'm certain required it (Lines 6, 7, and 9)
-Moved "will" to final line (I don't know why it wasn't there, I thought that's where I broke the line. woops)
-Adjusted some wording (Lines 3 and 6)
I'm sure there's more to do, but these seemed obvious to me, so I wanted to take of care of them now.
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