The Morning After

The Morning After

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05-24-2019, 12:46 AM

I don't feel I have a lot to add, but one thing the didn't work for me was the 2 mores in lines 3 and 4 of the second stanza. Maybe remove the first : to be just one night,
turned into more
Or alternatively change the second one to many more

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The Morning After - by Richard - 05-03-2019, 07:36 AM

RE: The Morning After - by billy - 05-03-2019, 11:48 AM

RE: The Morning After - by Richard - 05-03-2019, 01:03 PM

RE: The Morning After - by UselessBlueprint - 05-03-2019, 09:34 PM

RE: The Morning After - by Richard - 05-04-2019, 12:22 PM

RE: The Morning After - by UselessBlueprint - 05-04-2019, 01:29 PM

RE: The Morning After - by Richard - 05-04-2019, 01:36 PM

RE: The Morning After - by Cbobgo - 05-24-2019, 12:46 AM

RE: The Morning After - by Richard - 05-27-2019, 11:32 AM

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