Two Tenses

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Hello, I see potential here.
The piece is abstract but written as though the words are too lame to grasp what the poem is attempting to get across. 
It reads well, but I can't take away anything from it. It leaves me unsatisfied.
There's room to explore a duality theme. man / soul - this would have been more interesting

Two Tenses
It happened once and only once. 
The soul saw its own. the point here should be to communicate this without wording it explicitly

    A single glance is all it needs, even a drunken wink is enough. kinda cheeky, kinda boring

The mortal stuff offered its best intentions in clumsy heaps of doubt. ok, what are the intentions? 
But time sharpened the view and reservation faded with each day. ok, time sharpened the view? to what? what is fading? be clear

    The eternal spirit sees its need and presses, gently at first. 
    Once awakened the two conspire to unite.  maybe they are repulsed by each other, that would have been more interesting
    The soul can rest, the mortal can play. could have finished more strongly

as a reader, I don't want to follow somebody's jumbled thoughts; I have too many of those already
get to the abstract, and come back with something that I can use
otherwise your words are just noises to me, needs grace and harmony