For Victoria, a Friend
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(05-16-2019, 06:38 AM)Wjames Wrote:  Her first kiss was with a cigarette
singeing a hole through her shirt,
sparking a fire in the small of her back
as she rolled in a field with a boy
fumbling at the clasps of her bra,
drunk and nervous and laughing 
with their breaths forming clouds
for the moon to shine through.   ......, this is a wonderful line, the whole point of
The poem 


She told me the story the day we met,
and I wished I was the boy 
until the day she died, and I realized 
what might have been lost.
S2 feels flat after S1.
I was expecting a twist, an insight at the end, but there was no such payoff. Or maybe I’m missing something
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For Victoria, a Friend - by Wjames - 05-16-2019, 06:38 AM
RE: For Victoria, a Friend - by billy - 05-16-2019, 04:38 PM
RE: For Victoria, a Friend - by busker - 05-17-2019, 07:01 AM
RE: For Victoria, a Friend - by UselessBlueprint - 05-17-2019, 12:37 PM



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