05-14-2019, 10:37 AM
Thanks for the read, Duke. I'll look at trimming those little words out, but I definitely want to keep thoughts of "they missed a toe" because those are half of the thoughts surrounding the line. I didn't have the same gradual reveal as I do, but I wound up removing the line which only served as a reveal and nothing more.
From your logical quibbles, I see I'm missing some key information here, because Carlos and Paul are not transients or local homeless. The characters are real people from my neighbourhood who walked in front of trains at the station by my house, which is usually the route for local dog walkers.
As far as the title goes -- they've started installing these blue lights on many of the troublesome stations. According to the employees, they're anti-suicide lights. I guess the signs and hotlines weren't enough.
From your logical quibbles, I see I'm missing some key information here, because Carlos and Paul are not transients or local homeless. The characters are real people from my neighbourhood who walked in front of trains at the station by my house, which is usually the route for local dog walkers.
As far as the title goes -- they've started installing these blue lights on many of the troublesome stations. According to the employees, they're anti-suicide lights. I guess the signs and hotlines weren't enough.
If you're the smartest person in the room, you're in the wrong room.
"Or, if a poet writes a poem, then immediately commits suicide (as any decent poet should)..." -- Erthona
"Or, if a poet writes a poem, then immediately commits suicide (as any decent poet should)..." -- Erthona