Deluded Pride

[sudaisasif]

I like the parallel at the beginning, I want to do a line by line to explain all my reasonings, but basically it reminds me of different translations of the Divine comedy, some focus on the tone of the message to choose words for translation and others focus on the sound of the words.  Longfellow was praised but in my opinion unreadable.

A stranger greets me,
a friend laughs with me,
the reason isn't as simple,
there's more to it; right you just told us the reason isn't as simple, so we know there's more to it.

I added this to kind of reinforce the preceding sentence, do you think it still gets unnecessary even if it an intended repitition?


Perhaps it is my fame that gets me the greeting,
perhaps it is my charm that makes them laugh,
the reason is more than what appeals to the deluded mind,
there's more to it;


Has time ever spared fame to those excluding the saints?
Has the east ever remembered other than Muhammad per diem?
Has the west ever revered other than Jesus per se?
O deluded soul,
nothing that is in you can stand the stain of history;
Per se, per diem, who are you talking to?  The reader?

For charm was ever present in Robin the son of William, I like believing this is a reference to Robin williams: Yes it is, would that offend someone though or is it insensitive?
Destiny didn't spare it's flame however,
all that was left was the shedding of tears,
so much for the charming being's spell?


For attraction was ever discerning towards those who flaunted their beauty,
the world even went as much to grant a title or two,
yet the wind and sun worked together to make it all perish
while the gravedigger complemented with his craft,
does any being remember Miss Monroe? Too much thinking required in these last four lines to connect them so quickly, beauty/wind/gravedigger/monroe

Ah yes but had to make it like that to add immense imagery.

I want to believe you know about fame from experience, maybe your own deluded pride being awakened at last.  Actually I have these arrogant thoughts which I do not act on or believe but just wrote this as a refutation to them.

Thanks for posting!