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Stay Useless
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05-03-2019, 11:12 PM
I agree with UselessBlueprint, especially in terms of imagery. It might benefit your poem to use some more descriptive words to paint an image in your readers’ minds. Also, in some places, the rhyming seems a little forced to me? I’m very guilty of this myself, but it would help the flow of the poem to change your wording a little bit. Overall, great poem though, I enjoyed reading it!
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Stay Useless - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 04-06-2019, 11:54 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by UselessBlueprint - 04-06-2019, 12:53 PM
RE: Stay Useless - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 04-07-2019, 08:15 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by billy - 04-11-2019, 03:41 PM
RE: Stay Useless - by P3t3rW1ll14m - 04-13-2019, 10:21 PM
RE: Stay Useless - by windsor89 - 04-14-2019, 03:27 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by MadelineN - 05-03-2019, 11:12 PM
RE: Stay Useless - by Cbobgo - 05-24-2019, 01:51 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by Matroz - 05-24-2019, 06:14 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by NancyNutmeg - 06-22-2019, 06:08 AM
RE: Stay Useless - by one lass - 07-07-2019, 01:01 AM
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