05-02-2019, 10:00 AM
Hey Duke,
I like this one, especially how you used repetition, but with different punctuation. Plus, the souring milk is a pretty strong image, but its repetition mirrors the duality of the relationship in the poem.
Good stuff,
Riichard
I like this one, especially how you used repetition, but with different punctuation. Plus, the souring milk is a pretty strong image, but its repetition mirrors the duality of the relationship in the poem.
Good stuff,
Riichard
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