04-19-2019, 10:37 AM
Hey Windsor89,
I like how you use some colors in the beginning and middle of the poem to help convey the images, (the angry red circles, Ash-toned,color). It makes me want to see some color at the end. Esp, where the options are giving.
One other thing. With how intense you portray the voices to be. It makes me think that they would demand you die. They wouldn't be asking you to go grab a chair and rope or bottle of beach, but they are asking which one you are going to grab.
Hope that helps!
I like how you use some colors in the beginning and middle of the poem to help convey the images, (the angry red circles, Ash-toned,color). It makes me want to see some color at the end. Esp, where the options are giving.
One other thing. With how intense you portray the voices to be. It makes me think that they would demand you die. They wouldn't be asking you to go grab a chair and rope or bottle of beach, but they are asking which one you are going to grab.
Hope that helps!