Always Behind Closed Doors

[Knot]

Hi Richard,
like the title, sets a mood instantly.

Agree with Carl about L1 ending in a period and the ‘lonely palm’ problem :

don’t think you need ‘my windows’ in S2, just ‘I am … ‘
Do you need ‘make-believe’?

S4. I like what you’re trying to do here, but it doesn’t feel as fluent as the rest
(and ‘curtains drawn’ can mean both open or closed, so the ending doesn’t work
well for me. More so, on reflection, when the title is ‘Closed Doors’). Also,
‘lumber’ is a rather ‘lumbering’ word :

think you need to better develop the metaphor and make the format more regular.
(Maybe consider starting with S2).

I am boarded up.
[because?]
Nails catch those nosey enough
to find monsters hiding
in cracked foundations,

I will never be curtains open
[because?]
On a spring day, dust particles
ride lazy streaks of sunlight
to a rest;

Best, Knot.

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