Harbour Height 1st edit

[Knot]

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Hi Carl.
Enjoyed the read.

I don’t find the opening that engaging, but it picks up from L6 and I’d suggest
beginning with that line. It would leave something like this:

I can’t make out faces this high
just the purpose in their walk

passing blurred berths of tugboats
that look like interlocking plastic

building-blocks, as if wind-beaten
walkways hereabout don’t lack railings.

Except one guy, who has stopped
or merely paused, and shakes my hand

seeing me watching from the 27th floor.


- Confused by ‘as if wind-beaten’, ‘as if’?
- Afraid I’m not quite getting the ‘shakes my hand’ but I like the moment of
connection between strangers.
- I don’t have a problem with ‘except’ but ‘or merely paused’ seems redundant.
Is there any real expectation
that he is going to remain there permanently?
- If N ‘can’t make out faces’, how can the ‘one guy’ see N ‘watching’?

Best, Knot.


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