Second Edit: For a Radical, Long Dead/For Dawn Fraser, a Radical
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Hey Billy,
Thanks for the feedback. I have no idea why I felt the need to revisit this one after so much time, but it just hit me the other night. I appreciate you suggestions in the last stanza, especially about moving the librarian. I think the "dusty shelf" makes a better line ending.

Thanks again,
Richard
Time is the best editor.
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RE: For a Radical, Long Dead - by Donald Q. - 06-18-2017, 06:29 AM
RE: For a Radical, Long Dead - by just mercedes - 06-18-2017, 06:52 AM
RE: For a Radical, Long Dead - by nibbed - 06-18-2017, 10:35 AM
RE: For a Radical, Long Dead - by Achebe - 06-18-2017, 10:44 AM
RE: For a Radical, Long Dead - by Richard - 06-18-2017, 11:02 AM
RE: First Edit: For a Radical, Long Dead - by JKBetts - 06-30-2017, 05:39 AM
RE: Second Edit: For a Radical, Long Dead/For Dawn Fraser, a Radical - by Richard - 03-14-2019, 11:49 AM



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