over easy (v2)
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(03-11-2019, 12:42 PM)beccaannk Wrote:  I once wrote a poem about fucking
 
I remember only pieces, but I’m fairly certain it was terrible
(the poem, that is, not the fucking)
           
the last lines said
 
I want
scrambled eggs for breakfast
now, now
 

all this to say–
the morning after
when you asked
 
how do you want your eggs?
 
I was thinking
of the chasm between your back and my breath
as I savored the scent of our sex
and you slept,
 
and of your talk of Nietzsche and his goddamned 
relative truth – because, truly
what the fuck am I
relative to you
anyway?
 
and of the whistling squeal in your laugh
and whether (so I might relish rather than regret its inevitable absence)
I could come to loathe it.
 
over easy
 
I offered
more as a wish
than as a reply
I think the title contains the last strophe and therefore the poem would read better and smarter if you ended it st “loathe it”
Good work
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over easy (v2) - by beccaannk - 03-11-2019, 12:42 PM
RE: over easy - by billy - 03-11-2019, 02:02 PM
RE: over easy - by Knot - 03-11-2019, 07:50 PM
RE: over easy - by busker - 03-12-2019, 06:18 AM
RE: over easy (v2) - by beccaannk - 03-13-2019, 11:49 AM
RE: over easy (v2) - by billy - 03-13-2019, 12:35 PM



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