03-07-2019, 05:58 AM
Hey when I read your poem the first stanza paints a great external image of a worn down insomniac. I can picture them.
When you move onto the second stanza and dive into their head. It at first feels like you are going to (in just as much vivid description!) describe the internal turmoil, but then you start describing the external again. It leaves me wanting to know more about in the internal struggle and why they are overthinking. It almost feels like it could be 3 stanzas.
Hope that helps!
When you move onto the second stanza and dive into their head. It at first feels like you are going to (in just as much vivid description!) describe the internal turmoil, but then you start describing the external again. It leaves me wanting to know more about in the internal struggle and why they are overthinking. It almost feels like it could be 3 stanzas.
Hope that helps!