03-02-2019, 07:14 AM
Shadow, you bad boy
You’re taking my golden away
He couldn’t stay
didn’t say why
But he’ll make me go green in the spring
You could think about those lines. Maybe taking them out.
I read "go" as 'so', but that's me.
So jealous of sky
Who gets to carry you
marry you
Woo you, sweet golden, with blue.
This one, too.
I stretched out to catch the last rays of today
Then you sailed away
Heading west without me
You have places to be
And I’m left like the loneliest tree
The last stanza is all right with me. But something about You had places to be feels stronger to me, despite contextual logic.
You’re taking my golden away
He couldn’t stay
didn’t say why
But he’ll make me go green in the spring
You could think about those lines. Maybe taking them out.
I read "go" as 'so', but that's me.
So jealous of sky
Who gets to carry you
marry you
Woo you, sweet golden, with blue.
This one, too.
I stretched out to catch the last rays of today
Then you sailed away
Heading west without me
You have places to be
And I’m left like the loneliest tree
The last stanza is all right with me. But something about You had places to be feels stronger to me, despite contextual logic.