Contra Ayn Rand - Edit3

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Contra Ayn Rand


Origami teaches more
   than skillful fingers, memory,
   and seeing possibilities
   implicit in unformed material;

one also learns–
   having folded labor, time,
   and vision intricately
   through mute matter, owning it–

to loose it freely
   into river, wind or fire
   without regret.

edit2;

Origami teaches more
    than skillful fingers, memory,
    and seeing possibilities
    implicit in material unformed;

one also learns–
    having folded labor, time
    and vision intricately
    through mute matter, owning it–

to loose it freely
    into river, wind or fire
    without regret.



edit1;

Origami teaches more
    than dextrous fingers, memory,
    and seeing possibilities
    implicit in material unformed–

one also learns,
    having folded labor, time
    and vision intricately
    into matter, owning it–

to loose it freely
    into river, wind or fire
    without regret.


original version;

One thing
origami teaches,
    more than skill of fingers,
    memory, and seeing in a thing
    itself turned inside-out,
    implicit possibilities
    of material unformed

is,
    having folded one’s own labor,
    time, and vision intricately
    into matter, making it one’s own–

to loose it freely
onto river, wind or fire,
dispossessed without regret.

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