R.I.P.

[Richard]

Hey Cesar,
I agree with a lot of what Milo said. I'll go into detail below:

R.I.P. -I still struggle with effective titles, so I can tell you that you can do better here. This title feels a bit wasted because you end on "R.I.P" in the last line.

Beauty in the midst of death; painful and scarring, -I uncentered it on purpose. When I looked at it centered it made me think you were almost trying to do a piece of concrete poetry, which might be a direction to go in here, if you want.

No escape from such a natural fate,

But rest in utter silence and peace.-What does silence sound like to dead ears? There's an image to play around with.

No longer to suffer,

Nothing more to lose,

And no more pain to endure. -I want an example of the pain this person endured. What was their suffering? You need to go into more detail to draw the reader in more.

Beauty in the midst of death; peaceful and silent.

Forever, R.I.P. -Why not play around with the image of a gravestone that this might be written on? You could then keep most of this poem and just play around with describing the tombstone. Just a thought.

Overall, I think you have a good starting point here, and I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard