Second Edit: Pleasantries
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Hey Knot and aschueler,
Thanks for the feedback. Knot, I actually did play around with putting this into couplets before I posted it, so I might revisit that idea. Aschueler, I quite like the suggestion of the cake scraping down the esophagus, so I'll probably use that when I edit this one.

Thanks again,
Richard
Time is the best editor.
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Second Edit: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-24-2019, 01:55 PM
RE: Pleasantries - by billy - 01-24-2019, 02:54 PM
RE: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-25-2019, 10:40 AM
RE: Pleasantries - by Knot - 01-25-2019, 09:39 PM
RE: Pleasantries - by aschueler - 01-26-2019, 09:19 AM
RE: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-27-2019, 12:05 AM
RE: First Edit: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-27-2019, 02:12 AM
RE: First Edit: Pleasantries - by Knot - 01-27-2019, 02:44 AM
RE: First Edit: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-27-2019, 04:51 AM
RE: Second Edit: Pleasantries - by Knot - 01-27-2019, 09:07 PM
RE: Second Edit: Pleasantries - by Richard - 01-28-2019, 01:25 AM



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