First Edit: Lonesome as a Hotel Lobby Christmas Tree

[Knot]

Hi Richard,
poem of two halves, I think,
with S1 being much the stronger.

Lonesome as a Hotel Lobby Christmas Tree
- good title, though looks a bit too long.

Easily overlooked
- maybe 'ignored' for 'overlooked?
among late arrivals,
early checkouts.
Lights obey a timer,
- you might cut this line
(to me it seems to just get
in the way).
while an aged angel
- 'aged' doesn't do enough, I think
(maybe 'tired'?).
is crooked, burned out,
- the idea is good, but I don't think
you quite captured it, yet. (The
problem might be 'crooked').
but its halo freshly painted.
- 'her' for 'its'?

I think S1 could be presented as
two stanzas:

Easily overlooked
among late arrivals,
early checkouts.

a [fallen] angel
[shop worn], burned out,
[her] halo freshly painted.

I don't think you need the second
stanza. It's very flat (linguistically)
and it rather undercuts the scene
you set in S1.

Best, Knot.

.