12-16-2018, 11:07 PM
Hi Wjames.
Economically drawn, but
could be a little tighter I
think.
Motorcycle Leather
Gravel punctures the lung
[of the tire,] I roll.
[b]ranches claw at my face[,]
[[/b]my] [b]hands, draw blood.
[S]lowly I stand up[.]
[S]tones [have] stuck inside
[/b]- anything a bit more dynamic
than 'stuck inside'?
[b]the skin above my heart.
[/b]- I think 'I wear' is unnecessary
given the title.
Enjoyed the read.
Best, Knot.
.
Economically drawn, but
could be a little tighter I
think.
Motorcycle Leather
Gravel punctures the lung
[of the tire,] I roll.
[b]ranches claw at my face[,]
[[/b]my] [b]hands, draw blood.
[S]lowly I stand up[.]
[S]tones [have] stuck inside
[/b]- anything a bit more dynamic
than 'stuck inside'?
[b]the skin above my heart.
[/b]- I think 'I wear' is unnecessary
given the title.
Enjoyed the read.
Best, Knot.
.

