Glimmer

[billy]

for me the last line feels forced because you ran out of things to say or just couldn't stop at line 14. the title works well because of the repetitiveness there's not a lot to give feedback on. the repetition does work though. the one thing i got stabbed with was the rape line. if i'm reading it correctly it's the rape of her you're trying to process.

Glimmer



Line 1: I don’t know how to process all of this
Line 2: I don’t know how to process all of this.
Line 3: Help me.
Line 4: I don’t know how to process all of this.
Line 5: I don’t know . . . Am I supposed to do something?
Line 6: I don’t know how to process all of this.
Line 7: I could repeat, over and over, like the man who raped her
Line 8: how much I need her. How much things can work

Line 9: out. I don’t know how to process all
Line 10: of this. I don’t know how to process all of this.
Line 11: I don’t know how to process all of this.
Line 12: I don’t know how to be good. To smile. How
Line 13: to fix my eyes on something beautiful
Line 14: and say, “Isn’t that beautiful thing worth it?”

But I love her, so fuck it. I’ll figure it out. Line 15 can kiss my ass.