October (Haiku)
#4
classically structured, with the choice of colon over my favourite mark em dash more than appropriate.first line feels a little overloaded, though - snow and the title/moon are probably redundant as seasonal terms, while bright repeats snow. lovely with or without.
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October (Haiku) - by dukealien - 12-07-2018, 12:43 PM
RE: October (Haiku) - by billy - 12-07-2018, 04:06 PM
RE: October (Haiku) - by ellajam - 12-07-2018, 10:15 PM
RE: October (Haiku) - by RiverNotch - 12-08-2018, 12:49 PM



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