The End of the World

[ellajam]

Creeks become rivers,
Rivers become straits,
Straits become seas,
Seas become oceans,

This narrow strip of land
We once called love
Will be swallowed by the heat,
We'll be swallowed by the heat.

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It's easier to compose than to critique without a computer,

I really like L5-7 but I've been thinking about the last line. At first I wanted it gone, then thought about the difference between the "love" and the "we". For the purposes of the poem I'm not sure there is a difference but if there is I'd like it explained to me better in that last lines.

Thanks for the read, I've been enjoying it.