The New God

[Richard]

Hey billy,
I've been meaning at getting to this one for a few days, but work has been very busy lately.

I'm not one for formal forms, but I appreciate the effort it takes to construct a piece like this. The rhyming is nicely executed. I'm not going to comment too much on form here, so I'll try to stick to content and wording.

The New God.

Will paradise abound in flames tonight
as fire floods towards the pearly-gates? -I like the wording of "fire floods". It's nice juxtaposition, and fits your meter well. However, the expression "pearly-gates" borders on cliche to me.
Are ne'er-do-wells all getting better rates
while men of God have given up the fight? -I notice "God" is repeated a lot in this poem. I know it's an important word, but I wonder have you thought about playing around with the capitalization of it? Maybe write it in lowercase once to give it some extra emphasis? Hope that makes sense.
Has Peter sunk into the wings of spite, -I like this image of Peter. The "wings of spite" creates a nice mental image, and also plays on words well.
are he and "God the good" no longer mates?
and this usurper of  all Gods; who waits -Speaking on capitalization again, why not capitalize "usurper", since he is supposed to be trying to become the new God?
till souls of men become his neophytes. -Why just men? I'm hardly an expert at religion, but I know there is a history of sexism, especially in Christianity. Maybe think about changing "men" to a more gender neutral word, unless this is part of your intention, considering who the next stanza is about.  

Make way for Don the self proclaimed; the man, -The use of the name, "Don" made me think of a mafia boss, but then again, I think it might be a reference to a world leader.
who sells you gold but only gives you lead. -I like the imagery here, especially the symbolic ties to alchemy. The gold changing to lead sums up your poem well.
While wanting walls, old golden-balls lays waste, -I get the walls reference, but I'm a bit lost on the "golden-balls", but I could be missing something. I think repeating gold here takes away from the strength of the previous line, so I would suggest rewording it some way.
to moralistic thoughts; you'd think him Klan.
Within him, kindness and contrition fled -Why not "dead" instead of "fled"? I'm torn on "fled" here because, on the one hand, it doesn't feel consistent with the "walls" image earlier, but then again, these qualities could be escaping from behind the walls.
along with truth, a billionaire debased. -It might be overkill, but would you consider capitalizing "billionaire" here, based on what I said above? Just a thought.

Overall, I quite enjoyed having the chance to dive into this one, and I look forward to seeing where you take it from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard