First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps

[Knot]

Hi Richard,
like the revision and new layout (though the position of the title looks very odd
and it makes me want to read from left to right).
You might consider removing all punctuation and capital letters, the former seem
a little intrusive, visually, and I think it works fine without the latter.
(I think billy has a point about trying to make the lines of even length,
and there does seem to be a need for symmetry between 'top' and 'bottom')

Just a suggestion:
......................................................Concrete Steps

.............................................................................................................hurried
...................................................................................................fear of being late
.........................................................................................cracks whisper
...............................................................................familiar feet
......................................................................muted grey
............................................................storm clouds
..................................................snow settles
........................................corners crevices
..............................no one listens
....................to chipped surfaces
..........from fear
of being late

You might cut the last three lines, the repetition doesn't offer much
(and it probably should be 'for fear of' anyway), and 'no one listens'
makes for a stronger close, I think.

Best, Knot.

PS. Purely for my own curiosity (to see if it could be made to work
ascending/descending)

......................................................Concrete Steps

...........................................................................................no one listens
.................................................................................corners crevices
.......................................................................snow settles
.............................................................storm clouds
...................................................muted grey
.........................................familiar feet
...............................cracks whisper
....................fear of being late
..........hurried