11-17-2018, 03:51 PM
hi alex, i take what i said about the couplet back. after a bit of searching i found out that this is a Petrarchan Sonnet's rhyme scheme. for some reason i was only thinking of a Spenserian one.
(11-16-2018, 12:26 AM)alexorande Wrote: Hey Keith & billy,
Thanks for the feedback. Borne was used as in carried but the allusion to birth was intentional. Dragonback could work as dragon-back but I like the look of dragonback better; it’s written like horseback would be written. If this is wrong and you don’t like the way it looks then I’d like to hear.
As far as who’s the feral god, well, the god is just the being who created this world for the adventurers to live in.
The final line of the octave is a little clumsy with the feet, isnt it?
I’ll see how I can fix my beginner’s mistakes
Seriously though I’ll see what I can do. Again, thanks for the feedback guys
