Honey

[Richard]

Hey RiverNotch,
I'm a little bit lost on this one, but I do like some of the imagery. I'll go into more detail below:

Honey


The king is not fit for meat -Based on the title, I thought the king was some play on a bee. However, this gets debunked in the next stanza. Based on where this poem goes, is the king some sort of reference to god? Maybe I'm missing something.
and so is left by the side of the road
until summer.

A bear digs his claws into the carcass. -I like this image as a starting point, but why not get more visceral here and go into gory details?
Belly full, he lies in a cave.

Thieves pour bronze down a deacon's throat. -Personally, I would like to know more about the thieves? Are they young, or old? Why are they trying to kill the deacon? I feel like you could expand on the image here.
Left for dead, he unties his bonds, stands up,
and prophesies the return of the Lord. -Maybe switch to dialogue here, so the reader can hear the actual prophesy. I say this because I think this poem might be trying to comment on religion, and adding that dialogue could give you more material to play with.

Snow falls in the church -This made me think that the church was damaged in the robbery. Again, a broken church has the potential to be a strong image, but you need to expand on it.
like feathers -- or floating worms. -When I googled "floating worms", it brought up bass fishing. How can a worm float? I might be missing something again.

I hope I wasn't too critical here, and that some of what I said is helpful. I look forward to seeing where you take this piece from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard