rock heart

[cloud]

Hey cloud,
I think you have some nice imagery within the poem. However, I wonder if you could incorporate the title more.

I look forward to seeing where you take this from here.

Thanks for the read,
Richard

I took up the pen on the image of rocks against water
revisions have distorted the title's implication,
but science has told us

erosion occurs when:
waves of love exhaust
layers of heart and rock