First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps

First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps

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10-28-2018, 01:26 PM

Hey Busker,
Thanks for the feedback. The third stanza seems problematic, and I like what you said about the metaphor at the end. I need to give this some more thought.

Thanks again,
Richard

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First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 10-27-2018, 12:03 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by billy - 10-27-2018, 02:58 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 10-27-2018, 09:08 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Knot - 10-27-2018, 09:19 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 10-28-2018, 07:53 AM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by busker - 10-28-2018, 01:18 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 10-28-2018, 01:26 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Thunderembargo - 11-07-2018, 12:08 PM

RE: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 11-07-2018, 01:26 PM

RE: First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 11-17-2018, 01:38 PM

RE: First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps - by billy - 11-17-2018, 04:03 PM

RE: First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps - by Knot - 11-17-2018, 09:04 PM

RE: First Edit: Cold Concrete Steps - by Richard - 11-17-2018, 11:56 PM

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