After dinner naps

[billy]

my punctuation has often let me down, i see nothing wrong with your suggestions.

You're welcome, billy :-) (I'm pleased to read that giving feedback gets easier with practice!)

You could consider hyphens in 'Neon-green', 'bubble-blowing', and 'well-groomed'... so that was only three places, haha. And only if you want them there, of course. There's been a general move away from this sort of usage in publishing during the last few years, as it's felt that readers don't need to see hyphens to understand what they're reading. I think that's true here.