Gone (Revision)

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Todd, a few thoughts on my early reads...

She leaves home so often;
you stop noticing. Until the day, 
she doesn’t come back. not really understanding the punctuation choices up to here. The 2nd sentence is either a fragment, or, read correctly, turns your intended meaning on its head. I think you need to lose the semi-colon and the full stop. An em dash after "noticing" maybe? I'm not sure yet.

Light retreats to shadow,
You pull back the curtain Cap on "You'?
to peer down the tunnel
between streetlights, listen
to the hungry night, (then turn back
to your husband over dinner and push
food around your plate.) Enjoying the content here but the delivery feels like it could be cleaned up. The image is great but the words need shuffling.

The hours drag the rivers, You've enjambed mid-line! Not sure if I love it or it's wasted by not somehow having a line break on "drag". (of course that would involve playing with line lengths and maybe extra words, so I'm stuck on it)
waiting for a call, or a note,
like in the movies, but there’s no bargaining
except with God. She’s vanished wonderfully constructed line. Comic relief with built-in deniability 
in a perverse magic trick, would prefer "some" rather than "a" for tone. Only a personal preference- 
into a disappearing box, 
out of your life,
and the magician 
has had a heart attack.
No words exist
to make her reappear. 

I always like how simple and complex can live side by side in your poems. Another good example. I'll be back,
Paul