10-23-2018, 12:04 AM
(10-17-2018, 11:14 AM)ellajam Wrote: This is beautiful, with a softness to sink into. I especially like the oak line.Thank You For the Criticism. Is this site really goin' the way o' the Dodo-Bird? I really have enjoyed it's coherent design, directness and well-flowing pace. I suppose that only a blast of inspiration or a supple spring of funds will re-direct its course and keep it from drying up.
IMO it deserves a title that does it justice.
And a proofread.
(10-17-2018, 12:28 PM)billy Wrote:Thank you kindly Billy.(10-17-2018, 02:59 AM)Thunderembargo Wrote: I love this time of year, with ample candy apple,their nit theiir.
peppermint bon, tangerine dreams
supple sassyfrass julips drinking in
the endless autumn chill
with pomp and sass in their shoulders
and sheen in theiir supple golden thighs
Yet dry like Sagamore
and bumming bumble-bees ashore
waiting for you to dance them
and spy the maskettes that she makes
When attending your prayers and vigils
I will attend to you with whiskey
Coca cola, lemon and tea
Drink you down to the creek
and cross you there
and there
Forever I will live in your eyes
Sure and gentle
like the old oak of our den, of our forest glen
Where strawberries weep sugar and crystal falls
the Dawn Always
couldn't get the title but really enjoyed the freshness of the poem.
plutocratic polyphonous pandering


