First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow

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First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow

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10-22-2018, 06:58 AM

Hey rowens,
Thanks for the feedback. I like the "here" suggestion. Getting close to an edit with this.

Thanks again,
Richard

Hey all,
I've been somewhat minimalist with my edits. I pruned the first stanza a bit, but the only major change in the second stanza is me playing around with the ending. Feel free to let me know if it's going in the right direction. I'm very curious to know what people think of the change to the ending.

Thanks in advance,
Richard

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First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Richard - 10-01-2018, 12:40 PM

RE: Remoteness - by Todd - 10-02-2018, 10:23 PM

RE: Remoteness - by Richard - 10-03-2018, 08:57 AM

RE: Remoteness - by Keith - 10-10-2018, 01:59 AM

RE: Remoteness - by Richard - 10-10-2018, 11:38 AM

RE: Remoteness - by Knot - 10-13-2018, 07:51 PM

RE: Remoteness - by RiverNotch - 10-20-2018, 02:44 PM

RE: Remoteness - by ellajam - 10-20-2018, 08:25 PM

RE: Remoteness - by Richard - 10-20-2018, 11:10 PM

RE: Remoteness - by rowens - 10-22-2018, 05:44 AM

RE: Remoteness - by Richard - 10-22-2018, 06:58 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by ellajam - 10-22-2018, 08:13 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Richard - 10-22-2018, 09:27 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by billy - 10-22-2018, 09:34 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Richard - 10-22-2018, 11:28 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by ellajam - 10-22-2018, 06:51 PM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Knot - 10-22-2018, 10:24 PM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Richard - 10-23-2018, 07:35 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by nozaki - 10-27-2018, 02:22 AM

RE: First Edit: Remoteness/September Snow - by Richard - 10-27-2018, 11:55 AM

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